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The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 07:18, 9 June 2012 [1].

Bloody Thursday (2011)[edit]

Featured article candidates/Bloody Thursday (2011)/archive1

Nominator(s): Mohamed CJ (talk) 16:06, 27 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This article is the first I attempt here. It covers of the events of the forth day of Bahrain Arab spring uprising when police launched a pre-dawn raid on protesters in Pearl Roundabout, killing four and injuring hundreds. I hope that the article which was reviewed by Malleus Fatuorum and The Rambling Man, might be TFA on the second anniversary (17 February).

About half of the references are in Arabic, most of which are from Al-Wasat, Bahrain's only independent newspaper. It and it's editor-in-chief have won several international awards following their coverage of the uprising. Other sources include news articles and international human rights reports, including the BICI report which was cited 26 times. Most images are taken from a website which claims to be licensed under CC-BY-SA 3.0. Doubts were cast on whether the website really owns the copyright of images, and thus some were removed, however the "exclusive" images were kept, most of which are over 1000 pixels (some are over 4000) wide and have full metadata. Mohamed CJ (talk) 16:06, 27 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: No offence to Bahraini Activist, who has done great work on the subject, but previous DYK experience suggests that close paraphrasing spotchecks will be necessary. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:20, 27 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose based on spotchecks.

"demands included the release of those detained during earlier protests" vs "demanding the release of those detained during earlier protests"
"asking citizens to stay away from gatherings in vital areas of the capital" vs "asked citizens to "distance themselves from gatherings in vital areas in the capital""
"disturbution by the violent means used to disperse demonstrators" vs "disturbed by the violent means used to disperse demonstrators"
"said he spoke with his Bahraini counterpart and stressed" vs "said he spoke with his Bahrainian counterpart and stressed"
"Key institutions such as banks did not open and workers stayed at home" vs "Banks and other key institutions did not open, and workers stayed home"
"that will enrage many of its people and cost the regime international prestige" vs "that will enrage many of its people and cost the regime international prestige". Nikkimaria (talk) 04:06, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose per Crisco and Nikki. - Dank (push to talk) 10:47, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose per myself above. This needs work to pull it away from the paraphrasing issues. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:14, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've been away for a while. I've fixed the paraphrasing issues above which seems why it got 3 opposes so far. Mohamed CJ (talk) 06:30, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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