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Guitar Hero: Metallica

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I am trying to complete a WP:FTC for the Guitar Hero series, and per suggestions there, I need to have this article PR'd, which shouldn't be too hard, as it is just a stub.

Thanks, MASEM 12:59, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

Review by Guyinblack25

Same thing with the On Tour: Decades PR, I don't have that many comments as the article is so short. Here's what stood out to me.

• Clarify for the less business savvy: Q1 --> First three months of the year.
• The "History" section looks like the start of proseline.
• It also relies on a lot of quotes. Could these be summarized more?
• When was it announced? "Multiple news sources announced that in an SEC filing submitted by Activision..."

That's it, hope it helps. (Guyinblack25 ^talk 18:19, 4 August 2008 (UTC))

I have reworked the text as suggested , and included a reference to the official announcement at this year's E3. --MASEM 19:12, 4 August 2008 (UTC)

Looks good. (Guyinblack25 ^talk 19:21, 4 August 2008 (UTC))

• Comment The article should have a section relating to content, at least something like the Aerosmith one included x, y, z and somebody said these might be included. Nergaal (talk) 11:21, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
  • At this point, all that's been said about the game is that it's coming. I expect that ultimately we'll have more bands to include and so forth, but this PR is to review the article at this state in order to make sure it's good for the FTC for Guitar Hero. --MASEM 23:23, 12 August 2008 (UTC)