Talk:Active Minds

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I can find no active Wikipedia infomation on this subject. finding dreams 14:17, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

I am currently working on updating this page with better citations and more up to date information. Rose Northeastern (talk) 18:26, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

-- Per the issues listed at the top of the site, and the lack of updated information for the page, I used new sources and updated all information to make it a more credible article. Please let me know where you think I can improve or add more content if necessary! Rose Northeastern (talk) 02:04, 21 October 2019 (UTC)

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 6 September 2019 and 3 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Rose Northeastern. Peer reviewers: NortheasternFoley, MichelleBir., JessWeiss.

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Feedback
Hi Rose! I have reviewed your article and like it a lot. I made a few grammatical changes and moved a couple of words around for clarity purposes. A couple of other things are:
 * - Should you include (Organization) in the title?
 * - Take note that the page still has the "excessive sources..." box on the top of the page
 * - The first few sentences of the history section are repetitive to the intro
 * - Phrasing such as “silence and lack of awareness” might challenge NPOV
 * - Maybe add some more information about National programs, maybe including some examples of people who attended the events or photos of the events

Looks good! -MichelleBir. (talk) 21:19, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

Hello Rose!

I agree with everything that Michelle said above. I think that it is a great article and interesting. The only thing that I would add is pictures. For example, the Send Silence Packing program is a familiar visual. I saw that Wikimedia Commons has pictures related to the program, that might add to your article. Good job!

NortheasternFoley (talk) 23:08, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Rose, Upon reviewing your article, I've provided some feedback and suggestions for additions below; I've also made grammatical changes throughout.
 * - in the Send Silence Packing section, are backpacks meant to be representative of 1,000 or 1,100 college students whose lives are lost to suicide every year? I believe you meant to have the same number in this sentence
 * - consider rephrasing some of your sentences to avoid repetition; an example is in the National Conference section
 * - can you expand the History section to provide more context about the organization's leadership? Why is the organization called Active Minds?
 * - you could include a chart of the speakers and their titles/certifications under the Active Minds Speakers section
 * - perhaps include the location of the National Conference and provide additional information here -- are there any awards given out?

I would also echo NortheasternFoley's comment that adding visuals will further enhance your article. Great job! JessWeiss (talk) 04:47, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

COI tag (November 2021)
User:Activeminds2021 appears to be linked to the organization based off of username and has made a number of edits to the article. My Pants Metal (talk) 13:57, 4 November 2021 (UTC)