Talk:Bear/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jclemens (talk · contribs) 01:29, 16 February 2017 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for taking this on. Pinging co-noms Cwmhiraeth and LittleJerry. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:43, 16 February 2017 (UTC)
 * No problem. I'm sort of specializing in GA reviews of vital articles lately.  Cheers, Jclemens (talk) 07:52, 16 February 2017 (UTC)

Comments

 * I noted a 'mya ago' construct while I was reviewing the images. I believe that construction is redundant, incorrect, and redundant.  If I am wrong or mistaken, I will go to an ATM machine and withdraw $20 for the editor who demonstrates I'm wrong... ;-) Jclemens (talk) 06:45, 19 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed. We certainly don't want tautologies repeating themselves all over again now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:55, 19 February 2017 (UTC)


 * OK, I had not meant for this to take so long. I will get you a detailed walkthrough within 48 hours, but a few things conspired to steal my free time... Jclemens (talk) 02:57, 25 February 2017 (UTC)

First Read Through 26 Feb

 * "Members of the living lineages of bears diverged from Ursavus between 15 and 20 Mya ago," Found another one, and another one in the next paragraph. :-)  Suggest the entire document be scrubbed for these--I won't mention further instances of 'mya ago'.
 * Scrubbed four.


 * Caption on the Polar Bear/Sun Bear pictures is backwards--polar bear is on the reader's left.
 * Fixed.


 * In the Predators, parasites and pathogens the generic 'he' construction for man(kind) seems a bit archaic.
 * Removed.


 * "Public perception of bears is often positive, as people identify with bears due to their omnivorous diets, ability to stand on two legs, and symbolic importance,[100] and support for bear protection is widespread, at least in more affluent societies." I think the second and should have a semicolon or a period preceding it.
 * Split the sentence.


 * "Smokey Bear has become a part of American culture since his introduction in 1944, with his message "Only you can prevent wildfires"" A bit pedantic here, but the original message, IIRC, was FOREST fires--wildfires is the more current term.
 * Fixed.
 * Overall, the text is in excellent shape! Parts do come across as a bit repetitive sometimes, but that's entirely fine when people are only rarely going to read the entire article from top to bottom. Jclemens (talk) 01:46, 27 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:33, 27 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Thorough and speedy responses as usual. There'll probably be things that need work before you take this to FA, but GA criteria are met. Jclemens (talk) 08:42, 27 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:53, 27 February 2017 (UTC)