Talk:Charles Allen Thomas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 16:49, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: Hawkeye7 (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  16:49, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written
 * a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

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 * 5) ** Major Point 1: Early life "A graduate of Transylvania College and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, worked as a research chemist at General Motors as part of a team researching antiknock agents. This led to the development of tetraethyllead, which was widely used in motor fuels for many decades. In 1926, he and Carroll A. "Ted" Hochwalt co-founded Thomas & Hochwalt Laboratories in Dayton, Ohio, with Thomas as president of the company. It was acquired by Monsanto in 1936, and Thomas would spend the rest of his career with Monsanto, rising to become its president in 1950, and chairman of the board from 1960 to 1965. He held over 100 patents." ( not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body, his contribution to Organic Chemistry should be mentioned. )
 * 6) ** Major Point 2: Manhattan Project "From 1943 to 1945, he coordinated Manhattan Project work on plutonium purification and production. He also coordinated development of techniques to industrially refine polonium for use with beryllium in the triggers of atomic weapons in the Manhattan Project's Dayton Project, part of which was conducted on the estate of his wife's family. Shortly before the war ended, he took over the management of the Clinton Laboratories in Oak Ridge, Tennessee. Monsanto pulled out of Oak Ridge in December 1947, but subsequently became the operator of the Mound Laboratories in 1948." (summarised well in the lead)
 * 7) ** Major Point 3: Later life "In 1946 Secretary of State Dean Acheson appointed Thomas to serve on a panel to appraise international atomic inspection, which culminated in the Acheson–Lilienthal Report. In 1953 he was appointed as a consultant to the National Security Council, and he also served as U.S. Representative to the United Nations Atomic Energy Commission." (summarised well in the lead)
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 * 9) ** Major Point 1: Early life "A graduate of Transylvania College and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, worked as a research chemist at General Motors as part of a team researching antiknock agents. This led to the development of tetraethyllead, which was widely used in motor fuels for many decades. In 1926, he and Carroll A. "Ted" Hochwalt co-founded Thomas & Hochwalt Laboratories in Dayton, Ohio, with Thomas as president of the company. It was acquired by Monsanto in 1936, and Thomas would spend the rest of his career with Monsanto, rising to become its president in 1950, and chairman of the board from 1960 to 1965. He held over 100 patents." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 10) ** Major Point 2: Manhattan Project "From 1943 to 1945, he coordinated Manhattan Project work on plutonium purification and production. He also coordinated development of techniques to industrially refine polonium for use with beryllium in the triggers of atomic weapons in the Manhattan Project's Dayton Project, part of which was conducted on the estate of his wife's family. Shortly before the war ended, he took over the management of the Clinton Laboratories in Oak Ridge, Tennessee. Monsanto pulled out of Oak Ridge in December 1947, but subsequently became the operator of the Mound Laboratories in 1948." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 11) ** Major Point 3: Later life "In 1946 Secretary of State Dean Acheson appointed Thomas to serve on a panel to appraise international atomic inspection, which culminated in the Acheson–Lilienthal Report. In 1953 he was appointed as a consultant to the National Security Council, and he also served as U.S. Representative to the United Nations Atomic Energy Commission." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
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 * 14) *** "Charles Allen Thomas (February 15, 1900 – March 29, 1982) was a noted American chemist and businessman, and an important figure in the Manhattan Project."
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2: Verifiable with no original research
 * a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
 * b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with the other FAs)

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Cross-checked with the other FAs: Edmund Herring, Neil Hamilton Fairley, Landing at Nadzab, Albert Kesselring, James Whiteside McCay, Harry Chauvel, Thomas C. Kinkaid, Leslie Groves, J. Robert Oppenheimer, Kenneth Walker, Thomas Blamey, Douglas MacArthur, Frank Berryman, James B. Conant, Iven Mackay, Walter Krueger, Vernon Sturdee, Enrico Fermi, Niels Bohr


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3: Broad in its coverage

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4: Neutral

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Hawkeye7, I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article :
 * I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview for the Early life.
 * "A graduate of Transylvania College and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, (missing) worked as a research chemist at General Motors as part of a team researching antiknock agents." (1a issue)

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article which is our main aim here. All the best, --  Seabuckthorn   ♥  17:25, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review! I have fixed the typo, and re-worked the lead to add Thomas' contributions to organic chemistry. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:21, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks --  Seabuckthorn   ♥  01:14, 16 February 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  01:14, 16 February 2014 (UTC)