Talk:Child poverty in New Zealand

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Proposed Changes
I thought that this article has a great foundation with solid references. However, I think that there are a couple sections that can be further explored, especially the disparity of Māori and Pasifika children in impoverished conditions compared to other groups in the New Zealand. There are mentions of this sprinkled throughout the article, however, I believe a section that strictly focused on Māori and Pasifika experiences would provide a more complete view of child poverty in NZ.

For this article, I plan to base the structure off of the "Child Poverty in the United States" in an attempt to raise the article status. The United States article has a very clear, cohesive structure with four main topics: Background, Causes, Effects, Efforts to Combat. I plan to use the pre-existing credible information and reformat it into these four topics as a means of improving the flow of the article.

I also plan to add the specific subtopic of "Race: Māori and Pasifika children" in the Causes section. This will create a space to explain to connection between long-term effects of colonization and the disproportionate effect of poverty on the Māori and Pasifika population.

My final proposed change is a revamp of the final section of Efforts to combat. Currently, there is a section about 2013 recommendations which is outdated and vague. I plan to add relevant, current information and add on to the subtopics.

Lastly, I would like to welcome collaboration from other editors that agree or disagree with my proposed changes. Before I start editing the article, I would love to have a conversation about what the Wikipedia community thinks. Thanks!

Please visit my sandbox if y'all would like to a more in-depth plan for my edits: User:Miele17/Child poverty in New Zealand

Miele17 (talk) 03:44, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

Wiki Education assignment: Poverty, Justice, and Human Capabilities
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Recent Edits
I moved a couple of the sections around and regrouped information. This re-organization creates three main topics that are broad enough to welcome a much larger range of relevant information. The main headings are: Causes, Effects, and Efforts against child poverty. This re-organization emulates an existing article that is ranked higher on Wikipedia's content assessment scale. The article can be visited here: Child poverty in the United States Miele17 (talk) 04:53, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

Review
I think your edits have substantially contextualized relevant information, like the statistics on child poverty and what perpetuates it. I especially enjoyed your contribution of intergenerational disadvantages, and how they shape various points of inequality among the Māori children. Some changes I think would be better for the article, however, are making the headings more specific to the title, elaborating on statements like "negative, systemic consequences," and adding more links to other articles. This would improve action and accessibility. I would especially include illustrations in the form of charts/graphics about child poverty in New Zealand. Overall, I feel your additions were well done and relevant. Great job! Amraamir9 (talk) 16:40, 26 October 2023 (UTC)

Review from the other
~HI~ Another classmate here.

You did a very good job in adding content here in this page! There are a lot stuff that should originally be on this page and you added them here. I like you add a comparison of statitics between a decade ago and current. You analyze several new factors that lead to child poverty. You did a good job in completing this page!

Probably adding several images and then some blue links in your page will be good. It is somehow difficult to picture how poor these children really are without seeing images of their lives. Although it may be hard for you to get any pictures, but it will be great if you find several.

HRSun04 (talk) 20:54, 26 October 2023 (UTC)