Talk:Dan Dworsky

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Specific issues:


 * College football section, the first paragraph is only one sentence, and the last paragraph is only two sentences. Such short paragraphs give the prose a choppy feel, and probably would read better if the three paragraphs in this section were combined into just one paragraph. ResolvedCbl62 (talk) 16:11, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Same section, for those who are not familiar with the system of letters in high school and college athletics, an explanation of why it is significant that he won six letters in college might be nice. Will work on thatCbl62 (talk) Linked term. --TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 18:14, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Career as an architect section, apprenticeship subsection, one sentence paragraph should probably be expanded or merged.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 18:25, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Same section, Michigan stadium block m subsection. The subsection is only two sentences long. I'd suggest merging it with the previous subsection and titling the newly combined subsection "Work for the University of Michigan" or something similar. Merged into one sectionCbl62 (talk) 16:11, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Same section, community service subsection is very short and seems very "tacked on" coming after the two long lists. Perhaps move it above the Major works subsection and expand it if possible? Merged into prior sectionCbl62 (talk) 16:11, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Walt Disney Concert Hall controversy section. The first paragraph is only two sentences, giving the whole section a choppy feel. Perhaps merge the first paragraph with the second? It's not enough to fail the article, but the feel of the paragraph is very broken.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 18:08, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Not enough to fail the article, but there is little biographical information on Mr. Dworsky, I'm not sure if that is because it's not available.

I've put the nomination on hold for seven days to let folks address these small issues. It was a joy to read the article, and very interesting. Ealdgyth | Talk 15:44, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I see some work is being done, let me know when everything is finished! Ealdgyth | Talk 18:53, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Looks great! I've gone ahead and passed it and am working on the epaperwork now. Ealdgyth | Talk 00:46, 16 January 2008 (UTC)