Talk:Jack-Tor/GA1

GA Review[edit]

Looking good. Some suggestions:

Jack tells Liz and the writers' of TGS Tracy Jordan - don't need the apostrophe; it's plural, not possessive.
The writers' express their reluctance in doing product placements for GE - and again.
he admits that he illiterate and agrees to get help - "he is".
Tracy gets the message - somewhat informal; maybe reword.
Instead of the usual 30 minute episodes - "30-minute" hyphenated.
"Jack-Tor" referenced Studio 60 on the Sunset Strip when Liz tries to quote global education statistics, only to realize that she does not know what she is talking about - explain this. How is this a Studio 60 reference?
Robert Carlock, the writer of the episode, was nominated for his work for a Primetime Emmy Award for Outstanding Writing in a Comedy Series - maybe move this whole sentence to its own paragraph at the bottom; it doesn't make much sense tagged onto the end of the ratings.
Undue weight given to Tom Shales and Robert Canning, IMO. They've got about 7 comments each while MWM only has three - no need to have excessive detail from their reviews. Maybe cut them down a little.

Otherwise, awesome. It'll be on hold for a week so that's how long you'll have to make any changes (thought I doubt you'll need it!). —97198 (talk) 14:33, 25 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've fixed everything, except for the Studio 60 reference. I haven't seen the show myself; maybe another user can help out here. Corn.u.co.pia / Disc.us.sion 07:55, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Could you ask somebody? —97198 (talk) 07:58, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'd say remove it because, even if it is a reference, it's not a blatent reference and not all that important. -- ^[User]Jamie JCA_[Talk] 18:04, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

True, I removed it. (There is still enough production info anyways.) Corn.u.co.pia / Disc.us.sion 07:37, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Coolies, I'll promote it to a GA :) —97198 (talk) 08:16, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]