Talk:Joe Brown's Carmel Corn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Asilvering (talk · contribs) 00:25, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

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I'm not aware of any freely-licensed images available at this time, but I live in Portland and plan to take photographs at the Lloyd Center next time I'm in the area. Thanks, --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 02:49, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Suggestions (no bearing on pass/fail)
Is there any reason why some of these Oregonian articles have links and some don't? Would be great to have links for all of them.


 * Yes, some are accessible via the Oregonian archives at Multnomah County Library. In other words, some sources are from live URLs and others are from a library database. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 02:45, 8 January 2022 (UTC)


 * @Another Believer Got it. All the online links check out, so I'll happily AGF on the others. -- asilvering (talk) 03:08, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

I think Brown family (1932–1940, 1960-1992) would be clearer, or you could break it into two headings, like "Original stores" and "Reopening" (or whatever suits you best). Your call.
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 04:16, 8 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Two final suggestions (I won't hold the GA up for these):
 * "The business has also carried ... to the Portland International Airport." -- I don't think this is a problem in the lead, but I don't think it's lead-level important, either. I'd pull it.
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 05:16, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "The caramel corn recipe has remained mostly unchanged since the business was founded, as of 2019." -- I know why you have "as of 2019" in there, but because the sentence about Ferguson buying the business in 2019 comes so close after, I think it runs the risk of implying that he changed the recipe. There's an "at the time" in the sentence before and after the "recipe has remained mostly unchanged", so simply folding this sentence into either one of those would imply that even more strongly. If you think you can rearrange the sentences to avoid the implication that the recipe has changed, I think you should do so. -- asilvering (talk) 05:13, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * OK, I'll take another look. Meantime, I've added a paragraph break. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 05:16, 8 January 2022 (UTC)