Talk:Lorenza Böttner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Asilvering (talk · contribs) 03:19, 5 January 2022 (UTC)

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Possible places for further expansion (no bearing on GA review):
 * I'm interested in this "public performance of everyday tasks" part of her art, which isn't mentioned here but is taken up at Fischer 2016, 206-7.
 * a bit more on these two novels (wrote about her how?) - you could even do this now using Fischer 2016, 210-212.
 * Thanks for these detailed comments, !! It's good seeing important artists getting feedback beyond what I'd expect of a good article review, especially since I felt so alone in writing ... I started the article and there hasn't been much interest among editors. I'll try to have all of your comments addressed within a week, though probably sooner. There are some pieces that you've brought up here that I purposely did not include, but I'll explain my thought process more as I reconsider the sources. Urve (talk) 14:49, 7 January 2022 (UTC)


 * I am so glad you wrote it! I would never have learned about her otherwise, and she is awesome. -- asilvering (talk) 16:49, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Outstanding items
Almost everything in the above review has been addressed at this point. These are the three items I see as still outstanding: I am happy to leave these as suggestions for further improvement, and to pass this GA review as the article stands now. Thank you for writing this. -- asilvering (talk) 19:56, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * 1) I think you should probably also clarify here that Preciado was the curator for this exhibition at documenta - right now it reads like documenta and the later solo exhibitions are unrelated.
 * 2) "From 2018 onward, Preciado held a series of events..." - citing Fischer 2021 is helpful here. Also (imo) you should add the Toronto and Montreal exhibitions to this sentence, and link the two exhibition guides as footnotes. I don't think there are any other exhibitions at this point so I don't see any reason to mention only two of four.
 * 3) No mention of Michael Stahlberg’s 1991 documentary Lorenza - definitely should be at least mentioned. It's cited on Fischer 2016, 207. Likewise Frank Garvey's Wall of Ashes, same place. Possibly where you talk about the novels.