Talk:Mendocino County GMO Ban

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Excellent, well-researched article. Perhaps the introduction (definition) section could include a bit more info but it's a well written article.Lena815 (talk) 21:49, 15 April 2011 (UTC)

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Good job Vince. There is something, however that I think you can improve in this Wikipedia article:

1- you should give more references. Examples: the referendum in 2004 about Measure H (introduction); Measure H (introduction); there is a lack of references also in the second part of "background" section; the green revolution (environmental concerns); "well-known pesticide Roundup produced by Monsanto" in the "causes" section (eliminate "well-know" and give a link or a reference); in "the policy" section teh las sentence needs a reference; in "stakeholders" section these 3 sentences need a reference: "It accounts for approximately one third of Mendocino’s agriculture, the majority of which consists of wineries." "The organic farming industry in California has been the most organized lobby against GEOs due to concerns about cross-pollination." "In 2005, state senator Dean Florez attempted to pass a state preemptive bill prohibiting counties from banning GEOs."; in "evaluation" section this sentence needs a reference: "Mendocino is now cited internationally as a center of the organic movement and a catalyst for anti-GEO movements".

2- why "ban" is written in bold in the first sentence?

3- also more links are needed: California Plant Health Association, CropLife America, Monsanto, Dupont, Dow Chemical, RCBA, USDA, FDA, the Mendocino Organic Network, CHPA, FIFRA, EIS, RRA, KWS, NEPA and Mendocino County Farm Bureau

4- in the introduction you wrote: "Mendocino County has been added to an international list of “GMO free zones.”", which are these zones?

5- the references should be put at the end of the sentence (sometimes you put them at the beginning).

6- I think you should divide the environmental concerns section in 2 sub-sections: environmental risks and human health risks.

7- In causes you could say something about the historical behaviour of human beings to control and dominate nature (references to Al Gore and other readings of the semester)

8- the History sections should be organized with bullet points.

Vince005 (talk) 20:25, 19 April 2011 (UTC)

Hey Vince, fantastic work on this article. I agree with most all of the above points by Vince005. Some other points to think about: I hope that helps. Please feel free to ask me on my talk page or right here below this post if you need any additional explanation, or if you have any questions. Regards,  Jujutacular  talk 02:09, 20 April 2011 (UTC)
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