Talk:Obedience to Authority: An Experimental View

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I just think that the following excerpt is a bit off for an encyclopedia. "In 1963, Milgram published The Behavioral Study of Obedience[1] in the Journal of Abnormal and Social Psychology, which included a detailed experiment record and experiment of the controversial electric shock experiment. There were two stunning findings. The first was the extraordinary strength of the obedience and the second was the tension such experiment brought to participants.[1] Never the less, all participants reached an electric shock of 300 or more."
 * First of all, what does "a detailed experiment record and experiment" mean? I wonder if the writer mistakenly used a wrong word in there.
 * Is calling findings "stunning" a bit too value-laden?
 * "strength of the obedience" doesn't seem right. Maybe something like: "robust nature of obedience across all participants", or "marked adherence to commands", or "high level of acquiescence to the instructions of authorities", maybe even adding "despite being led to believe that [there was harm-- don't know how best to word this]".
 * "tension such experiment brought to participants" is also awkward. Maybe "tension" or "emotional turmoil/distress that the participants experienced"

I don't feel familiar enough with the work to make such changes, but I wanted to bring attention to them. Jkgree (talk) 17:13, 18 March 2019 (UTC)