Talk:Osama bin Laden/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 15:40, 3 July 2015 (UTC)


 * studied at university - at an university
 * link al-Qaeda
 * the lead is poor and mediocre. I suggest you to rewrite it
 * though I am aware of the Arabic naming system but the current unsourced material is nothing short of original research
 * the first line of early life and education needs to be reworded
 * specify "soon" and "later" in the next paragraph *"some sources", " one source"
 * "they were separated before"?
 * " as an adult " - what does it mean?
 * was described - by whom?
 * with violent jihad - remove violent
 * sometimes been called - make this clear
 * his formal name is Muhammad Omar not Mullah
 * "the only Islamic country" - no need of quotes
 * ... as well as from every Islamic country of the world. - Unsourced
 * terrorist by scholars - which scholars? And the word terrorist should be in quotes
 * heavily anti-Semitic, - remove heavily
 * The first para of militant activity is unsourced
 * According to Wright, - who is wright?
 * evidence of terrorist plots - terrorist is a word to watch
 * the affluent Al-Riyadh quarter - remove affluent
 * relationship with Mullah Mohammed Omar. - Remove Mullah
 * Saudi Arabia is sometimes called "The Land of the Two Holy Mosques" in reference to Mecca and Medina, the two holiest places in Islam.... - It is unsourced and should be in footnotes
 * It is believed that the.. - Who believed?
 * also "reported" in the next para
 * In the 1990s, bin Laden's... - The para is unsourced and needs to be better explained
 * ... U.S. Federal Bureau of Investigation placing bin Laden on its Ten Most Wanted list. - Unsourced
 * small convoys of recruits - remove small
 * severely damaging the latter - remove severely * later broadcast - later broadcasted
 * have been disputed - by whom?
 * however offer - offered
 * Shortly after the September 11 - specify the time
 * was the gravest failure. - Remove gravest
 * killing dozens - specify the number
 * were captured - was
 * Whereabouts just prior to his death - the timespans in the para is not clear
 * Critics accussed - which
 * .. government "baseless speculation". - Unsourced

You have 7 days to address the issues. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 11:27, 30 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Seven days have passed. Although I'm not actively involved in this GAN I'd be hesitant about seeing it awarded GA status; it relies too heavily on press and other not-so-ideal sources rather than academic and biographical publications devoted to bin Laden. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:10, 10 August 2015 (UTC)