Talk:Panggilan Darah

Informal peer review
(Jackets and ties not required)


 * "would-be-son-in-law" should that be "would-be son-in-law"? (I'm not entirely sure of which version is correct)
 * "run by ethnic Chinese producer": I'm not sure which variant of English you are using, but if it's BrEng then it should be "the ethnic Chinese...". It may differ if you're using a different variant. (There are a couple of other bits where there should be a definite article too, if it's BrEng)
 * "Sutinah and Poniman would remain active in the industry until 1986 and 1975": worth reversing the names to.keep the dates chronological?
 * Movies: a slang term, best avoided if possible

I hope these help, but please ping me if you need any more, or if you have any questions or comments. Cheers – SchroCat (talk) 22:52, 27 December 2015 (UTC)
 * All done except the last; I'm trying to avoid having "film" repeated three times in the sentence. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 23:30, 27 December 2015 (UTC)