Talk:Tyus Jones/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:55, 2 January 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  01:55, 2 January 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * See below for 1a issues. ✅
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * See below for issues with lead & layout. ✅


 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * Pass
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * Pass
 * C. No original research:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * Pass
 * B. Focused:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Pass
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Pass
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * Pass
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * Pass
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for the 1a & 1b issues. ✅ Pass.

1a: ✅


 * There needs to be a space between "of the prior five years." and "On November 11".
 * done--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:50, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Where the article says "over state powerhouses DeLaSalle — featuring Reid Travis — and Hopkins", there should not be spaces around em-dashes.
 * done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:56, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Abbreviations like "ppg." and "apg." should be spelled out or linked.
 * done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:26, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

WP:LEAD: ✅


 * Fix First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE).
 * Definition and notability should be in the first sentence (WP:BETTER). I recommend the following revision :
 * Tyus Jones (born May 10, 1996) is an American basketball player who is ranked among the top 5 players in the national class of 2014 by Rivals.com, Scout.com and ESPN. [1][2][3] He is a Minnesota State High School League (MSHSL) Class 4A state champion, two-time Minnesota Associated Press Boys Basketball Player of the Year and two-time Minnesota Boys Basketball Gatorade Player of the Year. He is playing his senior season for Apple Valley High School during the 2013–14 season. He has given a verbal commitment to the Duke University men's basketball team as a package with Jahlil Okafor and will be a freshman for the 2014–15 team.
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:02, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Fix Length (WP:LEADLENGTH). Lead can be expanded to reflect more information detailed in the body.

WP:LAYOUT: ✅


 * Fix Headings and sections (MOS:BODY).
 * Use a different heading for section Early life. I recommend High school.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:13, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * To improve the flow of the prose, I recommend removing Heading 4 2013 offseason.
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:13, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  13:03, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  20:44, 4 January 2014 (UTC)