Talk:White Diamonds/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jonathanischoice (talk · contribs) 22:20, 31 July 2023 (UTC)

Hi - I'll review this later over the next day or so, and build up a GA review template below as I go. A very quick read indicates to me that it may be too short, but I need to clarify for myself the tension between GA coverage requirements and topics that do not have a lot of sources (i.e. we should avoid length for length's sake!). I'd also like to know if Fragrantica is a reliable source, which if not, at least contains information which may be useful as a starting point for further research. Please note that I am relatively new to the GA review process, so bear with me. Cheers! — Jon (talk) 22:20, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
 * I'm starting a review now; I will probably make several edits over the next day or so, adding comments as I go, and then I'll let you know at the end and give us some time to fix any issues that come up. I'm slightly concerned that we haven't heard from you since 18 May, but I'll press on regardless! Summary table below will be filled in as we make progress. — Jon (talk) 10:06, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * after doing a thorough review and talking to a more experienced reviewer, I'm failing this review due mainly to insufficient scope and detail.—Jon (talk) 20:28, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

Lead section

 * I think even though it's by no means mandatory, we really ought to use the Infobox fragrance template here (and try and source a good image of the product from somewhere, see below). It is used in the obvious and famous Chanel No. 5, but also the other GA perfume articles.
 * The disambiguation template Other uses points, ironically, to a redirect and should be updated to point to White Diamond.
 * Maintenance tags for flavour of English and dates are not specified; see Category:Use English templates, and Use dmy dates / Use mdy dates.
 * Link perfume.
 * Introduce Liz Taylor from her lead, e.g. "British-American actress"
 * "sales of $1.5 billion" — I assume that's USD, but we should be explicit for all the non-Americans out there.
 * The lead is short and does not summarise the characteristics of the perfume itself.

Background and development

 * Elizabeth Arden should be linked a paragraph earlier ("CEO of Elizabeth Arden").
 * There is no mention of the perfumer Carlos Benaim (Fragrantica source(?) or elsewhere).

Description

 * Link to more of the notes - e.g. rose, narcissus, etc.

Marketing

 * Link either or both marketing / advertising campaign, short film, television commercial.
 * Use correct currency (presumably USD).

Commercial

 * link black-and-white, poker

Sales

 * Use correct currency (presumably USD).
 * The opening is potentially confusing - total sales up to 2018, then much smaller sales figures for 1993 and 2010 are quoted separately, are they totals or annual amounts sold just in that year?

Legacy

 * No mention of the 30-year anniversary release in 2021 of "White Diamonds Legacy".
 * Rename this section, and there could be more detail about the different packaging sizes, strengths (eau de parfum, eau de toilette), variations (en Rouge, Sparkling, etc.), collections (Diamonds and Sapphires, Diamonds and Emeralds, etc.) and so on.