Wikipedia:Peer review/James Milner/archive5

James Milner
This peer review discussion has been closed. This article became a good aricle almost three years ago and since then the subject's career has greatly escalated with him playing for his country at the world cup.
 * Previous peer review

I think this aricle needs another proper review to make sure it covers everything.

Thanks, BUC (talk) 12:49, 16 August 2010 (UTC)

Comments by Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * "Milner's talent in football, cricket, and long-distance running was recognised when he was a child. He represented his school in these sports and played football for amateur teams from Rawdon and Horsforth. " doesn't read great.
 * "only" POV
 * it reads like he stills plays for Newcastle. please expand/rewrite last section.
 * Early life
 * what's "11 GCES"?
 * "Milner took as much interest in watching football as he did playing it. " OR
 * "Peter and Lesley," unimportant
 * "played for the Republic of Ireland at under-14 level" doesnt match infobox
 * "against Italy, Czech Republic and Brazil, scoring a goal against Brazil.[8]" reads poorly
 * Club career
 * More pov:
 * with a deft first touch of the ball and manoeuvre
 * Milner continued to impress
 * He could be deemed a traditional English winger.
 * the whole style of play reads really poorly.
 * References
 * Don't mix date formats, keep to DD MONTH YYYY
 * Don't mix date formats, keep to DD MONTH YYYY

Decent article. I might do some more, but that should get something going. Consider reviewing History of FC Barcelona. Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)