Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Janet Jackson

Janet Jackson
Article was recently promoted to GA. I would like a review to ensure promotion when nominated for FA. Also, during GAN the review suggested the Legacy and Personal Life sections be independent from the Biography section, but I thought it looks better when those sections were sub categories of the Biography. I'd like a second opinion. Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 23:11, 4 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comments from
 * All date ranges, such as "From 1979-1980" should be ndash-es, not hyphens, per WP:DASH
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Add "Nevada" to Las Vegas, for readers unfamiliar with the city
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Those TV shows under "Early life and career debut" should be wikilinked where available
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * The image caption "The Jackson siblings in the MTV/Grammy award winning music video "Scream"" makes it sound like it was one award body, rather than two
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Jackson was criticized for the explicitness of the photograph." should be citeable, and cited.
 * "had heady socially-conscious message" → "had a heady..." or "...messages."
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Five non-free images seems excessive
 * "not under the ruse it was a "wardrobe malfunction";" Some mention of her previously calling it this should be included before its use here
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "expressed "sentiments of nonsupport from the label."" What does this mean?
 * Don't think there's any need to wikilink to birthday or party. Everyone knows what these are
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "...named Patrica in Perry's feature film, Why Did I Get Married?" → "...named Patrica in the feature film, Tyler Perry's Why Did I Get Married?"
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Though Discipline was widely expected to be Jackson's "comeback" album—compared to the The Breakthrough of Mary J. Blige and The Emancipation of Mariah Carey" Does this mean that The Breakthough and The Emancipation are not comeback albums, or that they are, in which case "compared to" would be better as "much like" or similar. Note that personally, I don't think of those two albums as "comebacks" as they never left, however, if they are, they should be cited.
 * note: the article in the citation for this sentence discusses the three albums. Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 07:42, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * I would shorten the discogrpahy section to listing just the albums, and then main to Janet Jackson discography, and put the rest of the information there.
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 08:10, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * The DVD/VHS section could go there too
 * ✅Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 08:10, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * main to Janet Jackson videography, too.
 * ✅ Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 08:10, 8 April 2008 (UTC)

That's all from me for now. Let me know if you want a follow-up, re-review or have any comments or questions that need addressing. -- ṃ• α• Ł• ṭ• ʰ• Ə• Щ•   @  00:14, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * For your question regarding the Legacy and Personal Life sections, I would put Personal life into the Biography section, but alot of the stuff currently in the Biography section seems more fitting if it were in a Career section, and the Legacy could be a subsection of that.

I would say that Personal life should be a part of the biography section, but I'm not sure about Legacy.
 * Thanks for the review! Bookkeeperoftheoccult (talk) 08:10, 8 April 2008 (UTC)