Talk:Magma ocean

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 23 August 2021 and 7 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Marie Andry. Peer reviewers: Xkurtma.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:25, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Magma Oceans Article Evaluation
Hello. My name is Marie and I am a student studying Environmental Science. I am working on this article as a part of my Introduction to Environmental Science class. I plan on making edits to this article and collaborating with others to make it as informational and accurate as possible. Here I will write a few of my critiques and opinions about the information currently provided in the article. Everything in the article appears to be relevant to the topic. There is nothing off topic within the article except for the mention of the moon-forming impact and the lunar magma ocean. However, those two mentions do assist in providing context for a better understanding of what magma oceans are and how they come to be. Therefore, they are relevant to the overall topic. The part in the article that refers to the energy for melting objects coming from large impacts was distracting and a bit confusing, but that may be due to a lack of background knowledge. This statement should be expanded on more for full understanding of its context and meaning for readers who do not have background knowledge on the topic. Three of the sources within the references section are from the early and late 1990’s which could be considered out of date when considering the comparison of the advancement of technology at that time and now. These sources also do not directly relate to the topic of magma oceans, and they may be taken out along with their references. A few things that could be added to the article or improved are detailed examples of magma oceans that may have existed, artistic renderings of what a magma ocean may look like, and what the consequences or aftereffects of the presence of a magma ocean are. Information such as approximately how long they last, if that kind of information is known, and how they are formed could also be beneficial towards the informational aspect of the article. The scientific information is generally presented clearly throughout the article and no jargon or slang is used. Throughout the article there are also links to other articles in order to give context to what the sentences are referring to. The term ‘accretion’ the phrase ‘moon-forming impact’ and ‘siderophile elements’ are all things within the article that have links to them. These links are helpful because the reader may visit them in order to gain more background knowledge about magma oceans and things related to the topic. However, since the article about siderophile sediments is outdated and not completely relevant to the topic of magma oceans, it may be removed. Only the relevant and up to date sources about magma oceans specifically should be included in the article. --Marie Andry (talk) 18:38, 14 October 2021 (UTC)