Talk:Zebra Imaging

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This is a new post from a new Wikipedia user. Please give me feedback on any errors that you find in formatting. I especially had trouble formatting the external links in the references section. Advice would be welcome.

I have asked the company for permission to use some images from their website, so hopefully I will soon have some illustrations to demonstrate the concepts.

Thank you for any suggestions, Ceweiblen (talk) 05:27, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

I noticed that this was tagged as "written like an advertisement", but no feedback was given on how to correct it. If you want to tag this article, please give some feedback when you do, so I know how to fix the issue. Thanks, Ceweiblen (talk) 22:00, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

Perhaps "press release" is a better term than advertisement. It's not meant to be an insult of course, but the page clearly reads as a press release. It is not nearly as fawning as many initial attempts so it's a good start. As an example, Benton was indeed a pioneer in holography but when you refer to him that way in an article, it reads like a press release. You put a flashy image on the page but no explanation of what it is. Another example "over 30 U.S. patents and others pending" ... while it may be true, this isn't fundamentally notable so it ends up reading like a fluff piece. Your links are to press release type comments about the company's rank in the Inc 500 and who got appointed to something and the "Texas Technology" list. Frankly, only people within this company would find this interesting or notable. Every company in the country might write similar things but factual or not, that doesn't automatically make them worthy of note. (This is meant to be constructive.) I would think deleting the marginal information, changing the tone a bit and explaining more of what the specific products are and their specific relation to the larger world would be useful. BobKawanaka (talk) 15:00, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the input. I'm trying to be as polite to the company I'm writing about as possible, so everything I posted, I asked permission for. (That's how I got the fancy image.) I'll try to rewrite it so it comes more from my point of view as an outside observer. As a layperson, I also can't explain the fancy graphics, so we have to hope that one of the scientists from the company will come on and add to the article for that. I am trying to get one or more of them to write about their 3D dynamic display. That's the whole reason I added them to Wikipedia. The display works in real time and displays a true hologram that can move. It's very very cool and I think it's unfortunate that most people don't even know it exists. Because I am NOT a scientist, I am afraid to try to write about it and be wrong. Ceweiblen (talk) 00:50, 20 October 2009 (UTC)