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Mary Spiller submission - 11 August 2015

 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Mary_Spiller

In response to your rejection of my article about Mary Spiller, siting insufficient "notability"

SulfurBoy, you have repeated WorldBruce's assertion (why is it, by the way, that you aren't willing to talk to the world as who you are? I am Andrew Corser from Cornwall in the UK, and don't need to hide behind some nom d'ordinateur!) that "notability" is the issue regarding Mary Spiller. Could I draw both of your attentions to: 1. The Oxford Times says: “Miss Havergal's regime was tough but thorough and the gardening school (1932-1971) produced several famous lady alumnae including Mary Spiller (who has trained huge numbers of gardeners in Oxfordshire).” I suggest this expresses “notability” - or perhaps you don't consider “famous ladies” to be notable? This is an independent, secondary source – whether you consider the Oxford Times as reliable may be up to question, but it answers WorldBruce's “one good source” jibe!! 2. WorldBruce says "The other BBC page only says Mary was the first woman to present Gardener's World." So, apparently, it is not significant that Mary was the first female presenter on the BBC TV's Gardener's World. At the time (1980 - 35 years ago: do either of you remember the prevailing culture at the time?) there was concern amongst the producers of the programme about having a woman in what had been a traditionally male role. Of course, there is little chance of finding any independent reliable secondary evidence of this. Again, it happens to be something to do with the success/progress of women - I hope this is not a problem for you to take on board. It is clear to me that this is something of note (viewing figures of Gardeners World were 2 million plus in the UK - not quite "Coronation Street" figures, but a significant figure for a "niche" subject). 3. There is another reference early on in the article to Shirley du Boulay's book. Mary appears in this book about the gardens of 12 expert gardeners. The chapter about Mary rubs shoulders with chapters about Alan Titchmarsh, Percy Thrower and Geoffrey Smith (and 9 other eminent and notable gardeners). In the world of gardening, this rates as notability in my book! That's 3 references. Then there is the BBC TV programme: WorldBruce says "The BBC apples piece doesn't mention Spiller at all." No, the snippet from the whole programme doesn't. Elsewhere, the programme does say a lot about Mary. So how does Wikipedia cope with this? I have a [pirate] copy of the programme, but it isn't currently available on BBC iPlayer...so is this independent secondary source not relevant because you can't view it? And, of course, Mary "was awarded the RHA Associateship of Honour in July 2008 [13] [14]" - this is an honour limited to only 100 living gardeners in the UK. I wonder why she was awarded this by the Royal Horticultural Society if Mary Spiller isn't notable? Now, if you can explain your assertions about notability, I would be interested - and if you retain your views that Mary Spiller is not shown to be notable by these multiple independent sources, then your influence within Wikipedia suggests that Jimmy Wales' idea has become shallow and obsessed with only the Interweb era. Andrew Corser — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewCorser (talk • contribs) 10:18, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

Tried to edit...
...comments about Mary Spill article (including link), but something funny happened - it seems to have picked up the previous subject's headers or something...no doubt this a user failure rather than something to do with the system...
 * -) — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewCorser (talk • contribs) 10:24, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

Rewritten Draft for review. Draft:Danny_Nettey
Hello, pardon me if I've already raised this on your talk page. I must say you're doing an incredible work here on Wikipedia. I've re-drafted an article which was once declined Draft:Danny_Nettey. This time I've rewritten it based on the reason why it was declined. Can you kindly review the article and advice please.

My kind Regards,   Kwamevaughan (talk) 11:35, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

12:46:32, 16 August 2015 review of submission by 196.221.167.45
I am not requesting a re-review. Question: How many sources, references do Wikipedia need to approve? I believe I had a one quality source in Wamda. 196.221.167.45 (talk) 12:46, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

23:54:11, 16 August 2015 review of submission by Jtdailey
Good evening. I appreciate the feedback offered by the previous reviewers considerably. After reworking the draft, it seems to read more in the the neutral encyclopedic form that is expected of pages here. I hope that this is acceptable. Thanks again for all your assistance. John Jtdailey (talk) 23:54, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

Jtdailey (talk) 23:54, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

Request on 01:48:49, 17 August 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Meemee215
Hi, You recently declined a submission of mine about Lu Sierra, the model. I am very new to this and I would like to bring the article up to the Wikipedia standards but I am having a bit of a hard time. You stated that the primary reason for declining the submission was its lack of Neutrality.. I understand and I edited out all (or what seemed to me) the "cheerleading" bits of the article, but it was still declined. If you would be so kind and help me a bit, I would be grateful.

Also I had another question about sources. I tried to dig up as many "reputable" sources as possible, but for the modeling world, especially back in the 80's its all very scarce. Will the sources I have be sufficient or is there a minimum number that I should have?

Thank you very much.

Meemee215 (talk) 01:48, 17 August 2015 (UTC)

13:32:32, 17 August 2015 review of submission by Caterina.merenda
Hi Sulfurboy, Could you help me in editing this Wikipedia draft for Duxiana? I changed all the references so that they were independent of the subject, yet the draft is still saying that my references aren't notable? Is it the references that aren't notable or is it that my references are still not independent of the subject? Please let me know ASAP. Caterina.merenda (talk) 13:32, 17 August 2015 (UTC)

Caterina.merenda (talk) 13:32, 17 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I think I can add some info on the issue. In its current state this article draft reads more like an advertisement than an encyclopedic article. The added references are useful for understanding the claims that are made in the article, but I don't think they make the article more notable. Notability when writing about businesses/companies has a lot to do with why the company in question is interesting to read about, and it will need info about basic facts such as background, founding, size etc. In this case it seems the article deals with the beds themselves and their (subjectively presented) merits. For a reference, this is the corresponding article in Swedish. Best of wishes.--Paracel63 (talk) 12:24, 19 August 2015 (UTC)

Changes made to draft - could you please see if this is adequate?
Hi! Article in question - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:OffiNeeds

This article was rejected by you - I have added a 4 new references including a daily Kannada Newspaper(State language of Karnataka, India) On the Help chat room I was told that it was alright not to also attach a translation for this reference but I wanted to double check with you, just in case. Could you please take another look at it and let me know if you have any further suggestions? I am new to Wikipedia and am keen on understanding more about this. Thanks very much AnanyaDoraswamy (talk) 04:30, 20 August 2015 (UTC)Ananya 20/8/15

Draft updated
Hello, please reconsider the draft Draft:Surgery for the dysfunctional sacroiliac joint for submission. Thank you Vokesk (talk) 09:39, 20 August 2015 (UTC)

16:12:35, 20 August 2015 review of submission by Maxlii
I have added some references, there were some already, so i am not too sure what is missing - please tell me more in order to ensure the page will be published. Thank you

Maxlii (talk) 16:12, 20 August 2015 (UTC)

Ganz Danubius Article re-submission
Dear Sulfurboy, The Ganz Danubius Article submission was declined on the 7 July 2015 referring that the submission read more like an essay than an encyclopedia article. I have edited, saved and submitted the Article to suit your request in encyclopedic manner. Please be so kind to review. This article is very important because Ganz Danubius once belonged to the Ganz Works (already exisiting wikipedia article) but Ganz Danubius should exist as an individual article because Ganz Works did not exist as a registered entity. Ganz Danubius has a significant historical role in the development of Hungarian shipbuilding traditions dated back to 1835. I am trying to establish this article on wikipedia to at least mention and highlight the 159 years of successful shipbuilding in Hungary. Kind regards, Eng. Endre Szabo (75.yo), the last technical director of Ganz Danubius until 1994 Ganz Danubius Ganz Danubius (talk) 12:13, 21 August 2015 (UTC)

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Ganz Danubius (talk • contribs) 12:11, 21 August 2015 (UTC)

Just submitted a new article....Pomiferin. Will you be the editor?

Bhc2004, 23 August '15 Bhc2004 (talk) 11:23, 23 August 2015 (UTC)

Draft: Rav Shmuel (musician)
I resubmitted this article to AfC after you declined the first draft (making the necessary corrections, of course). However, it's been over a week, and I have a feeling that an article that was already declined isn't at the top of the list. Just to expedite things, can you take a look at it and see if it's ready for the mainspace?--Invisiboy42293 (talk) 00:48, 24 August 2015 (UTC)

06:27:20, 25 August 2015 review of submission by RKUV
RKUV (talk) 06:27, 25 August 2015 (UTC)

Hello, the prestigious Guldbaggen award (re "notability") is included at the beginning too, discography links to Bärjed's major bands like The Soundtrack Of Our Lives, certainly well-known. Is there something crucial missing that keeps the article from being an "official stub" up on the 'net so other Bärjed/TSOOL fans etc can improve further upon it? Best regards, RKUV (talk) 06:27, 25 August 2015 (UTC)

23:28:07, 25 August 2015 review of submission by Gorgenkor
I've revised the article, adding section headings as recommended, and more background information. Also edited it for a more neutral tone, for example replacing "celebrated" with "recognized", etc, and resubmitted for a new review. Thanks! Gorgenkor (talk) 23:28, 25 August 2015 (UTC)

06:03:03, 26 August 2015 review of submission by 121.6.9.186
Hi, this is the first time we've tried making a Wikipedia article and have failed twice. We'd like to understand and get help on making a legit and reliable article.

I'm the Producer of Selfie the movie, and would like to understand how we can possibly cite / reference or write in a way that would make the article notable and be able to publish it.

Some examples would greatly help too.

Thank you very much for your guidance.

121.6.9.186 (talk) 06:03, 26 August 2015 (UTC)

84000: Translating the Words of the Buddha wikidraft
Dear Sulfurboy,

Our wikidraft https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:84000:_Translating_the_Words_of_the_Buddha was declined because we were unable to adequaltely provide adequate evidence of notability. As this project has most notability in the Asian media, I wonder if wikipedia will honor the sources? Would you please advise regarding the following sources?

Firstly, a reference is made here: Title: Buddhism in the Modern World Author: David L. McMahan Editor: David L. McMahan Publisher: Routledge, 2012 ISBN: 1136493492, 9781136493492 p.107

A story was written in View MagazineReturning to the Source Malaysia's Star newspaper: Project of the Century And also a reference in a Hindustan Times article: Kheyntse Norbu Straddles the Opposing Worlds of Cinema and Spirituality

Would these be considered reliable and/or usable sources according to Wikipedia? Is this sufficient to warrant an entry? Many thanks, 84Sarah (talk) 21:21, 26 August 2015 (UTC) Sarah, 8/26/15

ToolsGroup, Inc.
Hello,

I appreciate your reviewing my article on ToolsGroup, Inc. - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:ToolsGroup,_Inc. With regard to your tag, however, I'm not sure in what way(s) I failed to maintain a neutral tone. Would it be possible for you to, not fix the article, but provide me with a specific example or two of some things that I could change in order to address your tag? I can take if from there. I may well have deviated from a neutral tone - but at the moment I don't see where.

Thank you.Braedon Farr (talk) 19:10, 31 August 2015 (UTC)

18:59:20, 3 September 2015 review of submission by Zoebfab
Zoebfab (talk) 18:59, 3 September 2015 (UTC) Please review this edited page submission, as it is not for promotional purposes but to create a traditional encyclopedic entry for the company and the conservation work they do. It is intended to be a general body of knowledge describing the outdoor education and conservation work done in the Lower Mississippi River. Quapaw Canoe Company is a part of the history of the Mississippi Delta and is a recognized and notable business in the company. -Zoë Sundra

Kaymu Bangladesh Article
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Kaymu_Bangladesh I would like to inform that I have further worked on article by removing unnecessary material and making sure to only provide strongest references. I hope this will now make complete sense with respect to Wikipedia guidelines. Hariskhan12345 (talk) 09:40, 4 September 2015 (UTC)

Query on Draft:Unit Commitment Problem in Electrical Power Production
Hi Sulfurboy, I hope you are well. I am in discussion on WP:OTRS regarding Draft:Unit Commitment Problem in Electrical Power Production. Could you please clarify your copyright objection? I have skimmed the article you pointed to (but have not read it thoroughly), but don't immediately see the problem. It is easily possible I have missed something obvious, but I was hoping that you could save me the time looking for it more in depth. Cheers, Storkk (talk) 15:20, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Request on 22:07:33, 8 September 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Edward Dixon
I would appreciate any more detailed comments you could make about what specific citations didn't work or what general citation issues exist. I do see possibly an issue with the references which just shows Dickey in a list as perhaps "inconsequential." Do those citations need to be deleted and the simple assertion that his plays have been performed be assumed to be unchallenged? The reference on Nin Andrews of course didn't mention Dickey and was meant to support the assertion about her, but I see now it should be probably be deleted. There are better offline sources for the statements in the middle of the first paragraph. Is that alright, or do I need to stick with online citations? Thank you. Any help you can give me to edit this article is appreciated. Edward Dixon (talk) 22:07, 8 September 2015 (UTC)

Edward Dixon (talk) 22:07, 8 September 2015 (UTC)

Macaroni Kid Draft
Hi Sulfurboy, You recently declined my page on "Macaroni Kid" saying it's not notable and reads like an advertisement. I'm confused and have struggled with re-writing it because I wrote it from an neutral point of view (I'm not sure what else to say about the site except it's a great resource for parents around the country and I feel everyone should know about it). Also, I included as many sources as I could find about the topic and many of them come from news sources, CNN, etc. This is my first article and I took a lot of time writing it, but I'm stuck on how to add anything else. Isn't something that gets over a million views a month and has been covered nationally notable? I did read all of the links you posted, and included as much information as I have on the website (though I have not yet linked the sources on the page). Thank you so much for your additional feedback. KadenKy (talk) 22:13, 8 September 2015 (UTC) KadenKy

Advice please
Sharktrager442 (talk) 22:03, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

Hi there Sulfurboy,

Thanks for reviewing my article. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Ari_Norman I notice you found that I still need to get to a more formal tone of voice. I've already made one edit to address this issue. Is there any chance you could highlight something that needs a more formal tone so that it will help me filter that across the rest of the article.

Many thanks

Sharktrager442

Secrets of the Last Nazi
I wanted to let you know that I nominated this page for deletion. It ended up that the vast majority of sources were from self-published blogs, primary sources, and from other places not considered to be reliable, like Amazon, Twitter, and so on. Some of the content was original research as well. I have to admit, I'm not sure why you accepted this one. Tokyogirl79 (｡◕‿◕｡)  09:14, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

Thank you, Sulfurboy. It looks to me like Toyko girl has confused references which qualify for notability with references which inform the article - is looks to me like vandalism in good faith. Can you help? Cantelo (talk) 09:23, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

I'm now not allowed to include either links or offline sources. Can you contribute to the deletion debate, please?Cantelo (talk) 17:23, 9 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Part of the issue with this AfD and editor is that many of the sources were grossly misinterpreted in the article. In one instance a one line sentence in a blog interview with another author was used as if it was a full-length review. There are also several instances where material from the publisher and author was attributed to bloggers, merchants, and other outlets. In specific, one blogger was quoted as making a statement about sales and reception, however this quote came from the "about the author" section which is supplied by the publisher. This is pretty much never written by anyone other than the author, publisher, or agent. Amazon sales are also frequently referenced in the article in such a general manner that it gives off the impression that the positive sales are from outlets other than Amazon, such as traditional bookstores, supermarkets, and the like. There is also one case where the author says he is a top selling author in the thriller category on Amazon, but his screencap shows a different category entirely. The category might be within the thriller genre, but this does not automatically mean that he is the top selling author in the general thriller category on Amazon. I also noted that the article claims that he sells better than John Le Carre, Chris Ryan, Ken Follett and Wilbur Smith, however does not bring anything to really prove this other than primary sources. (These are another instance where press material written by the publisher/agent/author is reprinted in other places but represented as if it was written by a second party.) Because of this and other issues multiple editors are asking Cantelo to bring evidence of the off-Internet sources and many are telling him that the links he was using would not be usable in the article in any fashion. It's probably one of the worst cases of citing abuse I've seen on Wikipedia, to be very honest. Tokyogirl79 (｡◕‿◕｡)  06:41, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

Dream deferred
— Preceding unsigned comment added by Asdiprizio (talk • contribs) 16:58, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Request on 11:56:56, 15 September 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Jediwizardspy
Hello,

As a regular user for more than a decade, this is the first article that I've tried to create on Wikipedia (Draft:Bernard_Lippmann). I've made a couple of quick edits to try to remove possible cases of unsuitable tone in the article; however, would you please be able to assist by pointing out the passages, sentences or words which violate the requirement for tone/neutrality?

Much thanks!

Srivatsa (talk) 11:56, 15 September 2015 (UTC)


 * I've approved it. Sulfurboy (talk) 17:14, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

thank you for helping me with my page Sulfurboy. this is my first article so am very excited about this collaborative exchange. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Asdiprizio (talk • contribs) 15:16, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

09:30:52, 15 September 2015 review of submission by Leonieke van Dipten
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Longform Hi!

I want to ask you to re-review the longform page. I understand there already is a longform journalism page, but we believe a longform page is needed as longform is a growing (online) genre. Not only for journalism, but also for (art) criticism. I hope you reconsider this proposal because:

1) of a growling number of longform publishing platform: https://longform.org/ https://creatavist.com/ https://medium.com/

2) growling longform experiments by newspapers and new initiatifs: http://www.theguardian.com/news/series/the-long-read http://www.nytimes.com/projects/2012/snow-fall/#/?part=tunnel-creek https://decorrespondent.nl/english http://www.nrc.nl/longreads/

3) More and more research is done: Dowling, David and Travis Vogan. 2015. Can we Snowfall this? Digital longform and the race for the tablet market. Digital Jounalism 3(2) 209-224. (http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/full/10.1080/21670811.2014.930250) http://networkcultures.org/blog/2015/06/16/investigating-longforms-in-a-research-context/ http://networkcultures.org/blog/2015/04/02/towards-longform-publishing-at-inc/ http://www.theguardian.com/world/interactive/2013/may/26/firestorm-bushfire-dunalley-holmes-family

I hope to hear from you!

Cheers, Leonieke

Leonieke van Dipten (talk) 09:30, 15 September 2015 (UTC)
 * You need to resubmit it for either me or another editor to review it. Thanks. Sulfurboy (talk) 17:15, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Stephen J. Lukasik article
Hi There,

Unless I'm missing something, the only reason given was "The content of this submission includes material that does not meet Wikipedia's minimum standard for inline citations. Please cite your sources using footnotes."

The only criteria among those given in the minimum standards that appeared not to be followed was that there were more than one citation given. This was done because there are somewhat unusually three formal oral histories for Lukasik.

However there are no examples provided, so I don't really know. Could you provide an example? Appreciate any suggestions. thanks Amrutkowski (talk) 18:53, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Request on 04:07:48, 16 September 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Kayzeec
Hi, I have re-drafted the article 2 times & seems still its not up to requirement (Reason being the article needs to be in encyclopedic language & peacock terms needs to be removed). I need assistance in re-drafting the article, could you please help? At least a part of it as an example. I tried comparing with other wiki articles on Biography's, however, I couldn't locate much of a difference & I noted that some articles dont event have supporting references. Please help, as I have given many references as well.

Kayzeec (talk) 04:07, 16 September 2015 (UTC)

23:44:52, 15 September 2015 review of submission by Jzsj
I have tried to correspond with the 2 criteria you mention. I added several additional references, four to the most complete history of Catholicism in Belize, and then to the leading newspaper in Belize, a Jesuit national magazine, and the Garifuna Council website. As to the prominence issue, I hope that we don't accord more prominence to politicians who serve just a few years with no notable achievements than we do to people who serve the country, as Stochl did for over 60 years, as headmaster of the country's most prestigious high school for 9 years, founder of the high school equivalency program at this college while director of its Extension School, Director of Catholic Radio programming for 10 years and commentator on Radio Belize for 34 years, Secretary of the Belize Prison Fellowship, and therefore well-deserving recipient of Belize's Meritorious Service Award. Is your judgment that this person can never satisfy the criterion of prominence? In a very small country where few books are published, must we impose the same criteria for references as in the United States where there's a plethora of books being published? In Belize publication of a book is neither common nor cost-effective, given that five different languages are spoken at home and English is for most everyone a second language, learned in the schools. Most continue using their native languages at home: Kriol around Belize City, Spanish in the North, Garifuna in the South, and Mayan in the West. "Dem buks no da sel."Jzsj (talk) 15:55, 16 September 2015 (UTC)

Northwood Mortgage Page Rejected
Hi Sulfurboy,

Re. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Northwood_Mortgage

Thank You for taking the time to review my article.

For my 2nd time revising this article, I've added more 3rd party sources to justify the article. Could you please tell me what still needs to be fixed to be approved?

Thank You. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ssmith1520 (talk • contribs) 15:08, 16 September 2015 (UTC)
 * I would recommend reviewing WP:CORP. Sulfurboy (talk) 16:07, 16 September 2015 (UTC)
 * I would also suggest adding better third-party coverage such as news and magazine coverage. The current sourcing is not sufficient and anyone could easily question the article's weight and depth. SwisterTwister   talk  04:02, 18 September 2015 (UTC)

23:18:04, 21 September 2015 review of submission by Evangeline
Hello, I'm not exactly asking for a re-review. I came to take a look at the article at the request of its creator because I am slightly more experienced as a Wikipedia editor. I don't know either the creator (who is well known offline) or the subject of the article (not the same person or even friends, if that's what anyone is implying). We are all translators and this is a very prominent literary translator, so we are puzzled why the article is being rejected (especially, frankly, when there are so many articles about things like 1950s Japanese television shows and obscure 1980s video games). It is the nature of things that evidence of a literary translator's prominence are in things like the number of translations of important books by reputable publishing houses, major honors like the French one (the literary equivalent of the Legion of Honor) and awards won, offices held in major professional organizations, interviews in magazines and book chapters, etc. It's not clear to us exactly how much more evidence Wikipedia needs for this article to be accepted. Unfortunately, translators are almost never the subjects of articles. They are left off the covers of the books they translate and all too often not cited in references to the books. Literary translators around the world are currently in a global campaign to change that neglect and get translators the credit they deserve. This article on an important translator is part of that push and you will be seeing more about literary translators on Wikipedia. Let me know if you have any advice for us (you can tell me on my talk page if you like. I'd appreciate it). Thanks. Evangeline (talk) 23:18, 21 September 2015 (UTC)

Stub-Class questions
Hello Sulfurboy, I am glad to see that my article, Tracy Dahl, was accepted. I am feeling a bit puzzled though about why it was given stub status? I read through the criteria for a stub-class article, and it seems that insufficient reference source citations explaining why the subject is significant are usually missing from the article. I am puzzled because I cite several secondary sources, including Opera Canada, the Canadian Encyclopedia, Winnipeg Free Press, and AllMusic, among a couple others. I would like to see this article be pushed up to at least start status and would appreciate additional direction to make that happen. Thanks muchly! Smrondeau (talk) 22:40, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Bradley_Friedman
Hello Sulfurboy. I am trying to find out my my article is being rejected. I have cited all references and followed all Wikipedia guidelines. Please advise what I need to do next as I am at a loss.Acmetoys (talk) 03:49, 23 September 2015 (UTC) Bradley Friedman

Thanks!
 * Wikipedia cannot be used as a source, this would have been easily figured out by reading the links that were posted on the page. I would recommend reading them this time.

RE: Matthew Willis Draft Page
I have added more 3rd party sources and it is glaringly obvious all information presented is accurate. Wikipedia can be very confusing when it comes this process. I am not purposely trying to jam the system as you commented. I am just trying to get to submit an honest article and I am trying to follow your confusing guidelines to the best of my ability. Please help!

Respectfully, -Matthew Willis

Splendid1600 (talk) 13:01, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Lavdrim Muhaxheri
Hello Sulfurboy, I have resubmitted Draft:Lavdrim Muhaxheri. I had had to take a break from putting references into that article as I found working on it quite stressful due to some of the content — that's why there was an unsourced/poorly-sourced section at the end. I believe all the statements of fact that require sourcing under BLP have now been sourced sufficiently. I know there is a backlog at AfC and don't expect the draft to be reviewed immediately. While I understand that you are busy and have only so much time to devote to each article, I would appreciate it if, should there be specific assertions of fact that require more/better sourcing, you could specify which statements those are, since it is a fairly long article. Thanks in advance, — GrammarFascist  contribs talk 18:43, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

11:39:55, 24 September 2015 review of submission by Bjanson
Dear Sulfurboy: Will you be kind to explain exactly where new sources are needed? Greetings BjansonBjanson (talk) 11:39, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up
I have been totally swamped. I hope I can get to making edits on the page you tagged ASAP. Thanks. ValerieUTW (talk) 08:18, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

07:21:16, 27 September 2015 review of submission by Hostagecow381
Curious as to your reasoning behind rejecting the article. Attempted thorough citation.
 * What specific questions do you have?Sulfurboy (talk) 08:33, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

16:21:20, 24 September 2015 review of submission by JerrySteach
Sulfurboy: First, sorry, but I'm a newbie to starting Wikipedia articles, so please forgive any bonehead questions/comments. That said, with regard to the Virtium article....

I'm curious why the external links should be removed from the body, given the subjects 1) don't have their own Wikipedia page and 2) give depth to the overall content. For example the two Virtium founders and the source of the company's investment, cited in the third paragraph, have highly relevant industry experience but not their own presences on Wikipedia. Could you help me better understand that? Also, the supporting citations were not from press releases but those of actual published works, in journals and news sites.

Look forward to your replies. Thanks.

JS

JerrySteach (talk) 16:21, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Neither of those are nesscesarily reasons for having external links within the body of an article. As state, they should either be removed or moved to an ex links section if needed to establish the subject. Sulfurboy (talk) 08:35, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

16:55:12, 27 September 2015 review of submission by Goldencam
Hi I'd like a little more information on why this page was declined please. Is it that there weren't enough references or the references weren't adequate? As for this author's notability, I've come across multiple sources that list her as a "parenting expert." Should I list them all? Also, this stems from her being inadequately cited on the Grub Street, Inc. page. They link to Lynne Griffin, but that is a different person (actress). Any additional help you provide would be greatly appreciated. thanks! Goldencam (talk) 16:55, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

05:47:07, 27 September 2015 review of submission by Marchettimusic
I don't understand why this is not considered "Notable". I looked up the guidlines for notability and they are clearly met. A platinum single. Millions of digital downloads on MAJOR record label with very famous artists. THere are active wikipedia articles for composers much less accomplished. Is there an editor who can help me get this article up to standard? I see no reason why the subject should not be considered notable.

THanks
 * The person contributed to a platnium single and said label. I recommend reading WP:NMUSIC Sulfurboy (talk) 08:34, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

Yes I read this page.WP:NMUSIC The subject in question absolutely meets the criteria listed on this page for notability. Do you need more references? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marchettimusic (talk • contribs) 17:12, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

17:17:24, 27 September 2015 review of submission by Goldencam
Hi I'd like a little more information on why this page was declined please. Is it that there weren't enough references or the references weren't adequate? As for this author's notability, I've come across multiple sources that list her as a "parenting expert." Should I list them all? Also, this stems from her being inadequately cited on the Grub Street, Inc. page. They link to Lynne Griffin, but that is a different person (actress). Any additional help you provide would be greatly appreciated. thanks! Goldencam (talk) 17:17, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

Request on 09:29:45, 28 September 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Super34640
My article has been rejected by you.I have added citations but you still rejected it.It says to add citations but I have included them. I have explained where my info comes from. I think this rejection is a mistake. Also my article has been rejected 3 times but i included the stuff they said I didn't have. Please explain what I still haven't done. Thankyou.

Super34640 (talk) 09:29, 28 September 2015 (UTC)

Request on 09:32:29, 28 September 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Super34640
I am talking about my article. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Deji_Olatunji

Super34640 (talk) 09:32, 28 September 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Electric motor efficiency submission declined on 11th of August 2015 by user sulfurboy
Hi Sulfurboy, my trial to submit the article electric motor efficiency was declined several times, the reason for this have been quit different, this is most frustrating because I'm an new user. This time the reason for declining this article are titled: "wrong reference" I used the reference to the web site of BAM, which is the german "Bundesanstalt für Materialforschung", ministerial office for material research! the other reference refers to the European office for Low voltage switchgear, which is busy for the low voltage Industrie. both of them are highly official offices in European standardization, which I'm working for. my request is to accept this draft of article, it would be glad to leave a message at my talk page. thanks regards brennige (talk) 15:00, 12 August 2015


 * The draft looks more like a report rather than an encyclopedia article. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Symbio_Networks - Help please
Hi there,

I would really like to get the Symbio draft submitted. I believe I have now ground this down to it's bare factual bones as such am at a loss at which points are deemed to be promotional.

Please Let me know so I can delete or adjust these parts accordingly, as mentioned, I would love to get this finally submitted.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Symbio_Networks

Thanks,

Lauren


 * The article looks good but will need better information and sources because looking at the article, the only likely chance of notability is being Australia's largest VoIP carrier and will need more to be acceptable. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

16:43:51, 28 September 2015 review of submission by Mishaindiana
Hi! I'm not sure how else to make this more notable...it is a law that is in the books? Advice? Thank you n
 * The draft will need better coverage to suggest notability including local notability if applicable. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

10:43:07, 30 September 2015 review of submission by Jie2shen
I just did not get the point, because I viewed several published pages about different journals. On those pages, similar citations were used like that of this page. Please explain the difference between my page and the following published pages:

(1) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_International_Journal_of_Psychoanalysis

(2) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/International_Journal_of_Comic_Art


 * It will need better coverage such as from third-party sources to at least satisfy general notability guidelines and journal guidelines. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

15:33:28, 1 October 2015 review of submission by PeterPBGD
Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Draft:Philip_Trager&oldid=673985861  — Preceding unsigned comment added by PeterPBGD (talk • contribs) 15:43, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

On July 31, I responded to the four objections Sulphurboy had to my first-pass article by making revisions, some fairly extensive. Overall, it is a better piece as a result. The one objection I could not accommodate is the request to include inline citations, because the article's subject is a photographer, not a writer, and no quotations from his works are included in the article.

Then I must have done something wrong, because the article in the sandbox shows up as having not been revised or re-reviewed, but comparing versions via the "Draft:Philip Trager:Revision History" page shows all my revisions in place.

I have resubmitted the article in hopes it will end up with a reviewer, but please let me know if I've missed some crucial procedure or step, and I'll take it from there.

PeterPBGD (talk) 15:33, 1 October 2015 (UTC)PeterPBGD


 * The article looks good but could still use more sources. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Restoration of deleted biography page
Hello, Sulfurboy -

I am responding (appropriately, I hope) to your message from Aug. 2, 2015 asking for links to reliable reference sources to support my biography (Christian Stavrakis - current link is as follows: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Christian_Stavrakis&action=edit&redlink=1). I am ready, willing, and able to provide such reference material, but was sidetracked by a death in my family shortly after your message was posted. Please reinstate the article and I will happily provide links to several external articles, interviews, and other sources in order to validate the entry. Thanks in advance for your time and assistance. Phasmos (talk) 05:00, 30 September 2015 (UTC)


 * I would suggest asking User:MelanieN to move the article to your userspace such as User:Phasmos/Christian Stavrakis until it is set for mainspace. SwisterTwister   talk  07:44, 2 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the ping, User:SwisterTwister. I will reply to Phasmos on their own talk page. --MelanieN (talk) 15:00, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Request on 14:49:35, 3 October 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Filinden
You reviewed an article I drafted for The "Olympic Picasso". https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_%22Olympic_Picasso%22

You suggested I merge it with Roald Bradstocks Page https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Roald_Bradstock. "The proposed article does not have sufficient content to require an article of its own, but it could be merged into the existing article at Roald Bradstock. Since anyone can edit Wikipedia, you are welcome to add that information yourself. Thank you."

I have done so. Thank you for your assistance.

Filinden (talk) 14:49, 3 October 2015 (UTC)

Help with Wikipedia Page Please
Hi Sulfurboy,

You mentioned helping people out who recently just created a wikipage? Well I am having trouble with mine. Do you do personal emails? I am not very good with community talks. Here is the link to my page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Juana_Bordas

My specific question is: How do I remove the links throughout my page and resubmit? Because I am only given the option to "save." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Juanabordas (talk • contribs) 16:18, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Best, J — Preceding unsigned comment added by Juanabordas (talk • contribs) 16:15, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

16:27:03, 7 October 2015 review of submission by Juanabordas
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Hi Sulfurboy,

I accidentally requested a new review when I did not remove links like you suggested. Problem is, I do not know where or how to do this (where to change and remove the links) so my wikipage gets approved. Please advise.

Best, J

I have read the notability page and thought what I am writing is notable and that I established that, can you tell me specifically what is not notable. Or what I need to change? Thanks Aagreeny4 (talk) 23:34, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

02:48:01, 9 October 2015 review of submission by ErcScotti
Hello Sulfurboy Thanks for letting me know how I could improve this Draft. As a first time contributor (that the right term?) I appreciate the help.

This is my first “Talk.” I read the Guidelines, but it's not clear that I need to indent if it's just me talking at first, so taking the advice above ("Take as many lines as you need"), here we go.

Though I hope the revisions and new sources speak for themselves, I’ve included some additional background here for my sources below in case that helps determine worthiness,

I took your advice and, after digging up more info, I’ve revised my Draft based on the “Submission declined” comments, the “What you can do” comments, and the “Comment.”

I’ve added to both the quality and quantity of sources to more clearly meet the criteria for music-related notability as well as the three parts of the Golden Rule.

Meeting the Qualifications for Notability I revised to meet the “guidelines on the notability of music-related topics” focusing on where it says the subject “…may be notable if they meet at least one of the following criteria…”. It seems like my subject (the band HowellDevine) meets two of the criteria, #1 and #5. I realize that meeting the criteria is not a guarantee (it says “may be notable”), but if this subject does not meet the criteria perhaps you could clarify why so I can fix it or just stop trying. I don’t want to keep bugging you volunteer Wikipedians if this is a dead end.

Notability Criteria #5 says... "Has released two or more albums on a major record label or on one of the more important indie labels (i.e., an independent label with a history of more than a few years, and with a roster of performers, many of whom are independently notable)."

I assume HowellDevine meets this criteria because they’ve released two albums since being signed to Arhoolie Records. Founded in 1960 by Chris Strachwitz, Arhoolie has a roster of performers who are independently notable (there are Wikipedia pages for each pf these): Country Joe and the Fish, Mississippi Fred McDowell, Clifton Chenier, Charlie Musselwhite, Big Mama Thornton, Bukka White, Big Joe Williams, Lydia Mendoza, Flaco Jiménez, Michael Doucet and BeauSoleil, among others.

Notability Criteria #1 says... “Has been the subject of multiple, non-trivial, published works appearing in sources that are reliable, not self-published, and are independent of the musician or ensemble itself.”

As I said, I've improved the quality and quantity of these and in case it helps, I’ve summarized them here, in the order they’re noted in the Draft.

No Depression Magazine — A 20 year-old alternative roots music magazine that started in print in 1995 and currently published both online and in print. In 2004 No Depression ranked 20th on the Chicago Tribune‘s second annual list of the 50 best magazines in print, and 11th on Paste Magazine’s list of the 20 Best Magazines of the Decade (2000-2009).

KQED-FM/California Report — Broadcasting since 1969, KQED is the most-listened to public radio station in the United States, producing the California Report, a statewide radio news program for the most populous state in the US.

Sing Out! Magazine — It’s been published since May 1950. This is pretty much the journal of record for folk music (they include rural blues). Still in print, and with a website.

Living Blues Magazine— America's oldest, longest-lived blues periodical. Still in print, it’s run by the prestigious Center for the Study of Southern Culture, which is part of the University of Mississippi. This is the default journal of record for blues music.

KALW — Broadcasting since 1941, the oldest non-commercial FM signal west of the Mississippi. They’re site says their mission statement “…is to amplify the creativity and idealism of the Bay Area by: 1. Providing listeners with independent, credible news and information from a variety of local, national and international sources. 2. Producing local programs that connect listeners to their communities and that highlight the music, arts, and literature of the San Francisco Bay Area.

Full-Time Blues Radio — A weekly radio show broadcast on multiple radios stations in different states and distributed by Public Radio Exchange and is also available online. Produced by a broadcasting industry veteran, the show’s been on the air for 7 years. This is the independent source for the info about the band being finalists in an International Blues competition (the competition’s own site only lists outright winners, not finalists). This seems like much more than a “fansite" or fan blog. Actually, I don’t even know if they know HowellDevine’s music, they just reported the results of that competition as news.

The San Jose Mercury News — A Pulitzer prize-winning newspaper with origins in 1851 and published in its current form since 1942.

Dan Ackroyd/Elwood Blues — Known for a lot of things, like the first years of Saturday Night Live, but relevant here for being one of the Blues Brothers, both on SNL and in the movie, and hosting a nationally-syndicated radio show where he interviews blues musicians and plays their music. HowellDevine was chosen to perform and Joshua Howell was interviewed by Dan Ackroyd/Elwood.

DownBeat Magazine — Published in print since 1934, The journal of record for jazz music, including blues since the 70s.

Significant coverage: There are now several sources that discuss the topic (the band) directly and in detail. I haven’t included any brief “listings” of when and where they are playing, or other trivial material. All stories/articles include author’s byline and opinions.

Reliable sources: I’ve used reliable sources: long-established, traditional newspapers, long-established, print periodicals known as the authorities in the music genre, as well as other long-established news organizations including News & Culture radio stations.

Independent sources: The sources are independent. Nothing is written or paid for by the band, no wording is taken from their writing on their websites, press releases, or other biographical listings. Readers are able verify the sources based on info in the footnotes provided. And I am entirely independent of the subject. I’m not in any way part of the band, nor do I have I had any relationship with the band, their family members, social, business, or otherwise. My wife and I, as an audience members, have only seen them at music venues. I am not in any way part of the music entertainment industry. Just a roots music enthusiast.

You correctly pointed out that one of the sources didn’t mention the band. That was a source (New York Times story) that I used to verify notability for their record label, which seemed helpful because that was important criteria for the band’s notability. But based on your feedback I removed it. There already are separate Wikipedia pages for their label and its founder (who “discovered” HowellDevine), so perhaps its notability is already confirmed.

Thanks for reading, ErcScotti (talk) 02:48, 9 October 2015 (UTC)

HELP! LIERNA PAGE

 * good morning Itermirus,

I need you help urgently, i develop for long year and long research the page Lierna, an amazing village. The page was completly destroy and ereased without a real reason. All the content was true and I used a lot of references and bibliography. Please did you can check the history of LIERNA page? and check these? and said something against these vandalism? Thank you, --Alec Smithson (talk) 14:36, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I've already answered this on their talk page, though if you wish to weigh in at Talk:Lierna you are welcome to. Primefac (talk) 15:10, 9 October 2015 (UTC)