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Space Pilot 3000

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This peer review discussion has been closed. This article is currently a GA but I would like to eventually nominate it as a Featured article. I would appreciate comments on what areas are lacking in comprehensibility, completeness, sourcing or any other area with an eye towards the FA criteria.

Thanks for your time, Stardust8212 13:49, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

SGGH

I suggest:


 * You might wish to create the redlink in the infobox
 * I'm not sure I could at this point, I know nothing about it. I'll add it to my list of possible articles though and maybe someday I'll find some info on it. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Try to merge these 1-2 sentence paragraphs together.
 * Wikilink New York City
 * Done Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "as his work at Planet Express means that he will be able to travel in outer space." - from memory, the episode ends with "woohoo" and doesn't give any explanation as to why he is excited. Is this, therefore, speculation? Or drawn from the next episode(s)?
 * You're right. That was added recently and I probably should have reverted on sight. Gone now. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Wikilink FOX the first time it occurs, you have have done and I've missed it.
 * Added to the lead w/ a link. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "however, they malfunction when Fry remarks on this" - don't they just close sideways/upwards when he expects the reverse? (twice)
 * It closes on his head while he's still standing in the doorway. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "Another inside joke of the series is Bender's fondness for "olde fortran malt liquor".[7]" might want to explain this more for those not familiar (me)!
 * I'll see what I can come up with. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "In the movie Futurama: Bender's Big Score it is revealed that the spacecraft seen destroying the city while Fry is frozen are piloted by Bender and those chasing him after he steals the Nobel Peace Prize." requires a citation
 * I thought the same, I'll look for one. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Done Stardust8212 06:00, 15 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "Dick Clark as himself, Leonard Nimoy as himself" - are these in order of appearance or alphabetical? Not sure what the WP:MOS is on this.
 * I think both. Clark appears before Fry is frozen and Nimoy sometime after his arrival in the future. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)

Overall, quite a sound article. No abundance of fancruft like one might expect. Hope my suggestions are helpful, good work. SGGH speak! 07:54, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time to review this article, it's great to get a second opinion on these things and I will do my best to implement the changes you suggested, hopefully tonight after work. Stardust8212 12:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments from
 * You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, and my first suggestion would be to get your references into order. A number of your website references lack publisher and/or last access dates, which are the bare minimum needed for WP:V. Books need publisher, author, and page number on top of title. Decide on either last name first author formatting or first name first author formatting. When you've got those mostly straightened out, drop me a note on my talk page and I'll be glad to come back and look at the actual sources themselves, and see how they look in terms of reliability, like I would at FAC. 16:37, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking the time to review this article, I think I've got the formatting of the references all sorted out now, but I could be wrong. I'll drop you a note on your talk page, I look forward to your further comments. Stardust8212 18:14, 15 June 2008 (UTC)