Talk:Goddess of Victory: Nikke

suggestion for plot section
Sorry for making another plot section, but I can't seem to post in the other one. Here's my suggestion for the first two paragraphs:

''A Commander (the player) is en-route to reinforce a search and rescue party when his aircraft is shot down. He is then rescued from the wreckage by a nikke named Marian. Soon after, it's revealed Marian has been corrupted by the raptures; forcing the player to execute her. Upon returning to the Ark, Deputy Chief Andersen sends the player's newly formed squad, the Counters, on a mission to test their combat ability. Ingrid, CEO of Elysion, also assigns a nikke named Neon to the Counters as a "spy". During the mission, the Counters find intelligent raptures capable of operating a power plant. Despite their best efforts, the plant is destroyed. Anderson, impressed, assigns the group to the Outpost to operate without government surveillance.''

''Syuen, CEO of Missilis, forces the player on a black op to capture Chatterbox, a high-class rapture capable of speech. Chatterbox overwhelms the Counters, who only survive thanks to the timely arrival of Snow White, a nikke from an independant group called the Pilgrims. Unable to continue, the Counters call for an evac, which reveals the black op to the public.''

''All those involved except Syuen are temporarily suspended; in addition, Rapi is sentenced to undergo a memory wipe. Andersen then orders the squad to gather intel relating to Chatterbox and Marian's corruption. However, they are soon caught in a trap set up by a returning Chatterbox, who captures the player. Not long after, Snow White swiftly intercepts them and defeats the rapture. Before they can kill Chatterbox; he is rescued by Modernia, a Heretic nikke who has joined the raptures. The player identifies her as a resurrected Marian before she escapes.''

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Notes:

- I managed to shrink it down a bit and free up a bit of character space.

- Nikkes and raptures don't need to be capitalized because they are species names. For example, "humans" is never capitalized in a sentence unless it is at the start.

- I changed Commander to "the player" because I feel it has a better flow to it. It's a shame they don't have a nickname or a last name we could use, since it would make wording things a lot easier and remove a lot of redundant uses of "the". >.<

- Also as a suggestion for when more plot needs to be added, I think:

''Unable to continue, the Counters call for an evac, which reveals the black op to the public. All those involved except Syuen are temporarily suspended; in addition, Rapi is sentenced to undergo a memory wipe.''

could be shrunken to:

Unable to continue, the Counters return to the Outpost.

Greyoutt (talk) 03:02, 1 January 2023 (UTC)


 * Thanks. I've implemented most of your wording (difference). There are some things, though, that I didn't change. While it's true that species and mythical beings are generally not capitalized, the Manual of Style does make an exception to speculative fiction races, so I'm keeping the caps. "The player" isn't really used in plot sections unless the protagonist really doesn't have a name or title. Lastly, regarding the Rapi memory wipe, I don't want to spoil too much, but it's worth noting for later (at least I thinks so). Again, thanks a lot for your suggestions and have a wonderful New Year. lol1 VNIO ( I made a mistake?  talk to me ) 12:57, 1 January 2023 (UTC); edited 12:59, 1 January 2023 (UTC)

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